12 comments on “Book 11 Chapter 21

  1. I felt that the usage of the word ‘heart’ was a bit awkward at times, like “Hua Yan began to consider at a shocking speed within his heart”, where it would be best to use ‘mind’. Understandable that some martial arts stories tend to use ‘heart’ in the stead of ‘mind’, and interchangeably using the both of them might make things even more awkward. Rephrasing some of the phrases might be extremely difficult, but still wanted to let you know.

    As for anything else I could find:

    he would win Hua Yan
    he would win against Hua Yan

    and it’s radiance
    and its radiance

    to it’s maximum
    to its maximum

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